Prompt #4: Reimagining
Earlier that evening, Homer Barron had stepped across the threshold to the Grierson house, choking a bouquet of pink roses in one tight and clammy hand. Miss Emily did not appear to mind their crushed stems. When he’d presented the bouquet to her in the parlor, she had clutched them to her chest for just a moment too long before handing them to her butler, with instructions to have them arranged in a crystal vase and taken upstairs.
“They’ll go beautifully with our curtains, dear,” she had said.
“Our curtains?”
She smiled at him, then; a soft and innocent smile that made Homer Barron almost regret how much he had not wanted to come here tonight.
Now he was seated in the parlor, and Miss Emily was standing across the room, her back to him as she poured them each a cup of tea. They had exchanged polite conversation, but he had not felt up to his usual standard of jokes and banter tonight. A few quips with the Southerners had been all good and well most days, so long as he knew he would be leaving this place soon. Homer Barron knew how much a town like this loved a story. It was fun for him to make an impression, to wink at the swarms of kids who hooted and waved at him when he passed, to watch the women whisper as he drove by with the Grierson lady.
But he had never wanted to marry her. On their Sunday drives, she leaned into him and told him secrets from her past; he stored these in mind and recounted them later, drunkenly, to impress the starry-eyed young men at the Elks’ Club. He spun her stories into jokes, and they marveled.
But Homer’s plans to leave the South dissolved once the letter arrived from the bank at home. He had overspent his assets and overstayed his time, and if he could not repay the debts he owed within the next month, he would find himself with nowhere to go. He had, however, one escape route readily available: life in the Grierson house, with their family legacy to protect him. Just as he’d told the townsmen already, he had never thought to pursue the life of a married man before, but he had little choice now. It was Miss Emily’s hand or starvation. And so, here he was, with a ring in his pocket and the watchful eye of the late Mr. Grierson’s portrait upon him.
“I saw one of the church girls in town this morning, by the station,” Homer said to Miss Emily’s back.
She didn’t look up, and her only reply was the muted clinking of metal spoons on fine china.
Homer Barron cleared his throat. “She told me something about you.”
“I’m sorry,” she said in a measured tone. “I’m just fixing the sugar for your tea.”
“She said the Baptist minister made a call here.”
“Of course. He told me it was improper for a lady to run about with a man before they are married. It was all a misunderstanding, really.” At last, she whirled around to face him. “You do want to marry me, don’t you, Homer?”
His stomach dropped. She tipped her head like a puppy, her gaze clinging desperately to his.
“Yes,” he said.
Miss Emily beamed again, giddy and breathless as a little girl. She nearly floated as she brought the two cups of tea to the parlor table, then stretched out her hands and stood him up. Homer fought the urge to shrink away at her touch.
“I’ve prepared something for you,” she whispered. “Come and see.”
So he followed her upstairs, as if he were in a dream. He was on the verge of telling her about the ring he’d brought when she flung open the door to a bedroom, furnished all in pink. The roses he had given her were arranged, as promised, in crystal, and placed on the vanity. Once luminous and full, they now bowed demurely to the ground. A man’s silken nightshirt had been carefully laid out atop the right side of the bed, and the air was hot and sickly-sweet.
There it was again: her rarely beatific smile. “But your tea’s gone cold,” she said, resting a hand on Homer’s chest. “Come back downstairs with me.”
His gaze was frozen to the bed. Miss Emily Grierson threaded her arm through his and pulled him gently away from the upstairs room, her long and skeletal fingers stroking the fabric of his suit jacket.
Your reimagining of this story is very well done - I really like how your writing focuses on Homer Baron's side of the story, because the story's focus on psychoanalyzing Emily definitely led me to neglect his side of the story. One of my favorite parts of your writing is your explanation of why Homer returned to the Grierson house after disappearing, because it remedies a big gap in the townspeople's description of Emily's life. One challenge I have for this take - why would Emily have killed Homer if he was planning on marrying her? Unless, of course, she recognized his reluctance...
ReplyDeleteThis was very well written! I liked the amount of detail you put into the descriptions, and the writing style flowed well with the tone of the story too. Specifically, I like how you gave Homer a reason to stay, because that was one of the pieces missing from the original story.
ReplyDeleteI feel like I'm reading a published book right now! Awesome attention to detail and beautiful structuring. My favorite part about this post is how I was able to see myself within Homer Baron, especially since we know how the original short story ended. It allowed for a great reading experience that gives us that satisfaction of knowing more about what really happened.
ReplyDeleteWow! This is a really well done piece. It is truly reimagined, and it feels like a whole new story since its from Homers side of the story. There was so much effort put into this and it has a really good story. It ties up certain missing details from the original.
ReplyDeleteThis was a really great blog! You did a good job of reimagining the story from Homers perspective. It was really interesting to read about why Homer decided to continue living with Emily and his perception of her. Being able to see how Emily interacts with Homer and how he feels about her treatment of him adds a new level of insight to the story.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! This seems like it would fit the flow of the original story completely naturally, as the writing style mirrors that of the story very well. I also like how you not only tied up some loose ends from the original story, such as why Homer decided to stay with Emily, but also created some new events that fit in perfectly with the already existing events.
ReplyDeleteWoah! I love your reimagination of the background behind Homer and Emily's relationship situation before she eventually killed him. This scene really lays out her subtle obsessiveness and desire for control all throughout, leaving the reader with more clues as to why she would've killed him. I think your writing fits in perfectly with the story.
ReplyDeleteYoooooooooo! The writing style of your reimagining was really engaging. It fills in some holes and questions of the original and also opens up some more in the motives of Miss Emily to kill Homer. I thought in the original that maybe he tried to run away at some point and your interpretation could fit in with that. I did really like the last using the words "skeletal fingers" it creates a lingering feeling that something bad will happen (and as we know something bad does happen).
ReplyDeleteThis was really fun to read! I like how you included explanations for things that weren't included in the original story like why Homer Barron came back and how you described the roses that were starting to wilt in the prepared room. I thought it was really interesting to consider the story from Homer's point of view, and I really liked the way you captured his sense of dread. Your depction of Miss Emily as innocent and sweet (e.g. beaming, giddy and breathless) was perfect since it makes her eventual murder of Homer even more terrifying.
ReplyDeleteThis is a terrific reimagining! I am so glad that you chose "A Rose for Emily" to reimagine because I feel it is a story that has many characters with potentially interesting points of view; you nail the perceived attitude and demeanor of Homer perfectly from the descriptions in the story itself. I love that you set up, what only we know, is his impending death without making it obvious. The love and borderline obsession that Emily has with Home is illustrated wonderfully, and, in a way, extremely unnerving. The way that you nail the seemingly staple characteristics of Homer in this very concise reimagining is beyond impressive. Great job!
ReplyDeleteIt was very interesting reading about why Homer decided to stay with Emily and his thoughts about their relationship. I enjoyed reading about your interpretation of Emily when she's around Homer as it matches very well with the original story's interpretation. In addition, I thought the descriptions were very well done and really liked the ending. Well done.
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